tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post5367871646342072577..comments2023-09-27T04:43:42.272-05:00Comments on KjM - on the web: NocturneKjMhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17691028465137798738noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-82676142333128806632009-11-24T00:54:29.425-06:002009-11-24T00:54:29.425-06:00Again, all, you do me great service for reading th...Again, all, you do me great service for reading this piece and stopping to comment. I appreciate it greatly.<br /><br />And if it seemed I wrote music, or it sounded so on the ear, the air, the thanks are more to the attentive reader than to the stammering writer.KjMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17691028465137798738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-81576925385063421472009-11-23T15:46:30.025-06:002009-11-23T15:46:30.025-06:00Everyone's said it already, but I'll say i...Everyone's said it already, but I'll say it anyway - this is beautiful Kevin. I could hear the music as I read. <br />Sorry it took so long for me to stop in this week.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-55208936843927810932009-11-23T08:12:16.223-06:002009-11-23T08:12:16.223-06:00Beautiful ebb and flow in this piece, just like th...Beautiful ebb and flow in this piece, just like the music. Very well done.Lauritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03688820247531607677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-56666193341281777612009-11-23T06:59:47.411-06:002009-11-23T06:59:47.411-06:00I think you did write music Kevin.
Lovely piece.
...I think you did write music Kevin.<br />Lovely piece.<br /><br />Karen :0)Karen from Mentorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03685540761526680384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-3155131645478223642009-11-22T19:11:27.038-06:002009-11-22T19:11:27.038-06:00Beautiful piece, Kevin. As he said, it's harde...Beautiful piece, Kevin. As he said, it's hardest on those left behind. At least she will always have his music.<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01117770768990691070noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-71806786350039416092009-11-22T10:43:10.259-06:002009-11-22T10:43:10.259-06:00I think you got bittersweet just right.I think you got bittersweet just right.~Timhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06774944172261988587noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-58877359439380021002009-11-22T08:12:56.284-06:002009-11-22T08:12:56.284-06:00How sweet and sad. I like how she talks to him th...How sweet and sad. I like how she talks to him through the music. It's beautiful.Debhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17777178044868827470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-26054272859719759332009-11-21T19:51:21.611-06:002009-11-21T19:51:21.611-06:00Thank you all for the comments. I'm fond of N...Thank you all for the comments. I'm fond of Nocturnes, first created by an Irishman, John Field - though Chopin took the concept and ran with it, creating some of the most beautiful music there is.<br /><br />@Laura - bittersweet was what I was going for. I'm glad it came through.<br /><br />@Mazzz - originally her father was actually there, but it changed for me as I revised, deepening the impact, I think<br /><br />@Marisa - I was hoping I didn't strain the dialogue, given what it has to unfold. Glad it worked for you. And the humor, well - sometimes out of the depths...<br /><br />@Laurel - Glad the gentleness came through. I wanted to write a nocturne, a quiet gentle piece, but with emotional impact (and, since I cannot write music... :) )KjMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17691028465137798738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-84627493273721020202009-11-21T15:15:56.768-06:002009-11-21T15:15:56.768-06:00This is very lovely. I like how you progressed gen...This is very lovely. I like how you progressed gently through the scene between father and daughter. What really impressed me is how you captured the sadness and then inserted that little bit of humor without loosing the sense of loss.<br /><br />Nicely done!<br /><br />LaurelRavenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11906089638356227232noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-82922043864408882772009-11-21T06:57:22.176-06:002009-11-21T06:57:22.176-06:00Haunting, bittersweet, lovely.
Wonderful dialogue...Haunting, bittersweet, lovely.<br /><br />Wonderful dialogue between father and daughter. I did have a laugh at this bit of humor amid the melancholy: <br /><br />"...the leaving wasn't much of a picnic either."<br /><br />I, too, thought divorce had broken the family apart.<br /><br />Of course the title put me in the mind of the music of Chopin.<br /><br />Well done, Kevin.Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-71312518087714462672009-11-21T06:42:28.674-06:002009-11-21T06:42:28.674-06:00Very nice piece. I love how the feel of it changes...Very nice piece. I love how the feel of it changes about halfway through, when the reader realises it's not divorce, but deathmazzz_in_Leedshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01498100483681096442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-23892967.post-26254395812564489772009-11-21T05:43:10.065-06:002009-11-21T05:43:10.065-06:00Bittersweet, beautiful writing, Kevin. The pain of...Bittersweet, beautiful writing, Kevin. The pain of it poured out from deep inside the well.Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.com